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There's a new kind of bully in town

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This is the edited version of my Narrative Writing Sample. I hope you enjoy it!

Supper toy makers

The story is mainly about electricity toys that the kids make with light bulbs, batteries and two wires.
The kids are super toy makers. because the called make electric toys.
The kids were meant to make electric toys.

Daniel made a toy room for his toys to stay in
with a bulb for a light .
Mrs gray let them go on with their play because they worked hard.
They used a light bulb, a battery and two wires.

Narrative Stories

On a rainy and cloudy morning Nikki went to the shop to get some chocolate. She shared it with Dj  because she was poor and hungry.


When Dj got her chocolate a bully came and took her chocolate. He also pushed her over. So Nikki said ( hey ) go pick on someone your own size you mean bully. When he pushed her over she was crying and had blood all over her legs, arms and her elbows.


Nikki picked Dj of the ground and took her home but she said” she had no home so Nikki took her to her rich home and gave her some plasters. Nikki got her a cold glass of water to cool her down. Nikkis mum came down and took Dj to the doctors just in case she got bad injuries.


They told the bulliesx mum at the shop what he had done that was bad.. So then he got  grounded for a year. Then Nikki and Dj’s work was finish at the shop and talking to his mum plus the chasing. At the end Nikki and Dj lived together in a rich home and Dj never became poor again.

My Camp Holidays.

On the holidays I went to willow park camp. The first thing I did on Wednesday is going on the green machines. It was fun because Nikki and I were playing tiggi on the green machine.

Then we went to to the quad bikes they were kind of like motorbikes but even better for kids. I accidently bumped into Korobeau so then I laughed because it was kind of funny.

So we moved on to the go carts I was listening to one of the leaders but I was supposed to go slow but I went fast. When I saw myself heading for the fence I let go of the breaks and the trigger .

So I had to get a ice pack for my leg because I had a major bruise. I had to put it back because Korobeau had to use it because he went on the quad bikes and the tyre went on his face. 

The next day miss Hamilton Mr Burts daughter took a picture of my bruise